Changes I need to make to my Double page spread

First paragraph:
Move "quite frankly I love it over" and change sentence to "I listened to my favourite singer Demi Lavato and it inspired me to follow my dreams because of the things she had also been through and quite frankly I love it"
Second paragraph:
"As well as losing my dad which made me go off the rails"
Last paragraph on the first column:
"Words cannot describe it"
First paragraph second column
"I've"
Second paragraph
"follow my dreams anyway!"
Fourth paragraph
"make a new album"